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The white teddy bear
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There was a 13 year old girl who’s name was Sophie she was very lonely the only friend she had was her white teddy bear. Sophie loved her teddy bear she took it to school and every body laughed at her because they thought teddy bears were for baby’s. she always went home and cried and her mum said do not worry they are just teasing you. I will go to their house to talk to their parents.but please unpack your bag. Sophie unpacked her bag and her teddy was not there. She started crying and she new that the girls would of put it on the ground she went to school the next day and the girls said they dropped it.
5j2018
February 21, 2019 at 12:01 AM (5 years ago)What a sad Story Leila, I hope the girl was happy again once she found her bear.
Mr Lynam
lsmith70
March 13, 2019 at 3:33 PM (5 years ago)Thanks mr Lynam
Ciara
February 22, 2019 at 7:28 PM (5 years ago)Hi Leila,
Poor Sophie, everyone loves the teddy bears, I am sure the girls at school were just trying to be cool by being mean. Unfortunately, sometimes people do do that. Next time, try to remember to include all your capital letters as well as reading your piece back to yourself out loud. That way you will notice any missed punctuation and if your writing makes complete sense.
Keep up the great work!
Ciara (Team 100)
Ireland
lsmith70
March 13, 2019 at 3:35 PM (5 years ago)Ok, Iwill try to read back over it again when i’v Finished the story.
cchessher
March 4, 2019 at 2:21 PM (5 years ago)Lovely