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Aug
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Light and Dark 2 the fight
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One morning in France Ava was just getting out of bed. Then the phone rang it was her sister Maddie, Ava was sick of her ringing her so she answered it. Ava said what do you want then Maddie said just because we moved away doesn’t mean it should be like this. Ava hang up the phone then Maddie kept on ringing Ava.Ava kept on hanging up the phone then she answered the phone and said LEAVE ME ALONE then Maddie said jeez we won’t move but you will regret it why said Ava you will find out Maddie said.
By Jazmine
John
August 29, 2019 at 2:15 AM (5 years ago)Hi Jazmine, I like how you left a cliffhanger at the end. I always like a good cliffhanger. Do you have a sister maybe? Is that why you wrote about a sister argument?
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Harlee
August 29, 2019 at 11:08 AM (5 years ago)Dear Jasmine, I really like your story. I also loved the detail you put into your writing. Another thing I like is the cliffhanger. I love cliffhangers. Do you have a sister? Did you base this story off of something that happened to you?
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Keep up the good writing!
jwalker4j
September 2, 2019 at 12:24 PM (5 years ago)No
davonne
August 30, 2019 at 12:22 AM (5 years ago)hello jasmine,i really enjoyed reading your story especially the cliff hanger.
Which makes me wonder what inspired you for this mini story.
Has a family member or friend moved away to inspire you to make this?
HAve you read a book that gave you an idea to make this?
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jwalker4j
September 2, 2019 at 12:26 PM (5 years ago)My name is spelt jazmine davonne and harlee
cchessher
September 9, 2019 at 12:21 PM (5 years ago)I love your post especially the cliff hanger.